ca i get yourr opinion about my poem about aspergers?

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can I get your opinion on my poem abut asperger's


Another day goes by

Trying to find my way

Through a world that is so loud

So loud are the sounds all around

Going through my ears

I try to focus on each day

Trying to

Push the fogginess away

Every little thing relating back

To a few topics I care about deeply

Rarely anyone understands the connection

But if I try to keep it to myself I lose track

Of what you are saying

Generally I can't keep up anyhow

I try to process what you say

But By the time I get my comment

You are already on another day

People think I'm doing it on Purpose

Trying to be rude

They don't get that many things they take for granted

Things they can do with ease

Even things they may do subconsciously

May actually be hard for me

They can't fathom not being able to filter little sounds out

Sounds they sometimes can't even hear

How a whisper can sometimes sound like a shout to my ears

Can feel like a wave of electricity

Rushing to my brain

slowing it down

shocking it

Suddenly knocking me off track

And you expect me be able to read your body language?

I love it! This is a great way of explaining my mind!

I like it. Gives an insight into my mind.

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YES!

As a poem,it's good.As an idea,i dislike it.While doing something like this once or twice is ok,i think way too many of the members here do "Autism stuff".Autism poems,autism music,autism this,autism that.Seriously....it's too much.Still a good poem though;)

LOL i must be on the wrong site??? I thought this was wrong planet?? You know.....
"Wrong Planet is the web community designed for individuals (and parents / professionals of those) with Autism, Asperger's Syndrome, ADHD, PDDs, and other neurological differences."

Why would you try to limit someones creativity?

Honestly, it seems like you wrote something in prose and added line breaks. It doesn't really flow well.

It's a decent idea though.