I need help with a word.

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How do I spell "malliss?" I can't figure out the spelling. It sounds like malous, or malliss. Someone help me please.

malice - a desire to harm others or to see others suffer; extreme ill will or spite

is that the one?

Yes! That's it. Thank you!

Scurries back to story he's writing.

you're most welcome - it always gives me a buzz to support a creative mind,

Thank you again for your help! Here's where I'm using the word:

sounds fiercesome,

whilst i was reading it, i instantly saw the text come to live.

for me it looks like a derelict gothic spire covered in moss standing on a large plain stretching to the horizon. there is no other building in the vicinity.
the taziin are winged, yes most definitely, they have wings and beaks and large talons, and their skin is metallic green (blue bottlefly green)
the two protagonists were fighting this battle at quite some height and had to hold onto the slippery moss covered stones.

it's really eerie, i used to do this as a kid all the time - choreographing classical ballet in my mind to Mussorgsky's "Night on bald Mountain" and Stravinsky's "Firebird" (in reality the dancers probably would have dropped dead after rehearsal, ).

my biggest shock came, when i watched "The Neverending Story" - i felt nauseous at the sight of the film, because it had destroyed my own fantasia, i felt like i could not visit the fantasia that i created from the book without the "hollywood contamination" any more, .

p.s.: i hope i have not "contaminated" your mental picture of your story, with my bluebottleflygreen platitudes about your heroes,

No you haven't because Taziins look like something else, but I enjoyed your imagination all the same!

I have a full 32-page, 24-chapter, scene-by-scene outline. Needless to say I know where the story is going. This is very early in the story.

Mini-critique:
One line you have "deliberated" when I think you meant "deliberately".
Also at the end he yells "Tier 2!", psyched by so-and-so's achievement.
Leave out things like ", psyched by so-and-so's achievement".
I forget what style critics call these clauses but long story short they are unnecessary clutter. I knew dude was psyched when he yelled "Tier 2!" That's enough - you gave the reader the correct impression, move on.
These are minor criticisms. Rock on.

I think you're describing passive versus active but I want to thank you for your feedback and spell corrections. Again, it is very raw and unedited. I'm in the stage where I'm writing this story as quickly as I can just to get it on paper.