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27 Dec 2009, 6:46 pm

I am looking for 9 lines for a poem. You can post twice. I'm interested to see how this forms.

I'll start... ps...We can also change the format, so if you want a line to go to a number 2 line for example, just type in the number and we'll tweak it at the end.

1.Your picture blazes my eyes.


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27 Dec 2009, 11:45 pm

(I chose this definition of blaze: A destructive fire.)

2. With a force that cannot be contained, except by the storm that swells within me



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28 Dec 2009, 10:25 am

Maybe we need a new first line.

The silence is blaring


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28 Dec 2009, 10:36 am

I think people are just shy... I am too but whatever.



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28 Dec 2009, 10:46 am

Magnus wrote:
1.Your picture blazes my eyes.


your picture blazes my eyes..............
it does not make sense,
but it is no surprise.
the captured image
of your disguise......
is fodder for the muse,,,,,,,,,,,
of the simple but wise.

(like mona lisa or something)


it is not a great first line i guess



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28 Dec 2009, 10:57 am

It makes sense to me. I remembered a time when I was in love with this guy, and he got a girlfriend and I saw a picture of them. It burned.

This is supposed to be fun. B9, you are rude. I wanted to take a bad moment, make it light and funny perhaps. Maybe it could go in any direction. Sure it may be fodder, but so what.


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28 Dec 2009, 11:02 am

I don't think poetry has to 'make sense', it's supposed to leave an emotional impression, at least that's how I view it.



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28 Dec 2009, 11:06 am

Magnus wrote:
Maybe we need a new first line.

The silence is blaring


the silence is blaring,
and i am not caring,
of the message it shouts out so loud.....
when people are speechless.
they also are "preach-less",
they dissolve to a featureless cloud.
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as you can see i have no idea how to write poetry.



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28 Dec 2009, 11:11 am

Magnus wrote:
B9, you are rude.


i did not mean to be rude. i just added a few feeble lines to your launching sentence.
i am not talented at writing poetry, but it does not make me rude for contributing what i can.
i will refrain from further involvement within this thread.



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28 Dec 2009, 11:15 am

b9 It actually sounded really good, or condescending... :?

I only came back to this thread to say: I think b9 just finished the whole effing poem.. :lol:



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28 Dec 2009, 11:17 am

b9 wrote:
Magnus wrote:
B9, you are rude.


i did not mean to be rude. i just added a few feeble lines to your launching sentence.
i am not talented at writing poetry, but it does not make me rude for contributing what i can.
i will refrain from further involvement within this thread.


I'm sorry. You are good at writing poetry. I liked your entire poem, but I just thought you were making fun of me. Excuse me for being s sensitive. :oops:


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28 Dec 2009, 11:39 am

Ok, great warm up everybody, let's keep this going!...... :D

(I'm going to get fired because of WP...)



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28 Dec 2009, 11:50 am

haha

That's the spirit.

How about we start over and you do the first line?


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28 Dec 2009, 12:05 pm

No, your first line is fine.. Besides, I drew from it to write my line... :)

Maybe you could pick one of b9's for the 3rd line.



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28 Dec 2009, 12:25 pm

5 lines so far...

the silence is blaring,
and i am not caring,
of the message it shouts out so loud.....


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