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syzygyish
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08 Mar 2014, 8:26 am

Where are those scoundrels?

Where are those beautiful idiots hiding?

I have a craving to swallow them down whole like an owl

Struggling and screaming and not realising the hole that their in

Where are they now?

Those moronic clowns.


Why can't they play anymore?

My teeth are sharper than ever

and my claws are howling for imbecilic whining

I'd love to play with them now

toss them up in the air

crunch down on their bones before they hit ground


Where are the clowns?

those undeniable disturbing, perturbing and catastrophically annoying young things?

suddenly I miss their noisy endeavour

where are they now?


Have you perchance left any noisy annoying wild things for this maw to devour?


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08 Mar 2014, 8:34 am

[Moved from WrongPlanet.net discussion to Art, Writing, and Music]
...because it's practically a poem (and very good, too). :wink:


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08 Mar 2014, 9:27 am

I don't like it on first reading but it seems like a work of art I could come back to over and over and get something new from each time. I agree, very good. Very evocative of things I don't want to feel.

Are you ok to say, what did you intend to convey?



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08 Mar 2014, 1:52 pm

I like it. It reminds me of Pennywise.



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08 Mar 2014, 2:07 pm

The trolls tend to hide under a bridge waiting for a goat


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08 Mar 2014, 7:17 pm

You might find some in the PPR forum.



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08 Mar 2014, 7:26 pm

They've scattered.


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08 Mar 2014, 8:36 pm

If you don't mind I'm going to post this on another forum where there is a thread related to trolling, because this is beautiful, elegant, truthful writing. Kudos to you.


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09 Mar 2014, 6:08 am

Thanks everyaspy!
:D

It is a poem, random thoughts have been surfacing in my subconscious recently inspired by earlier skirmishes and battles fought (and won) with the little devils. It's pure nostalgia plus a bit of schadenfreude! :)

I should have worked on it and reworked it and finished it before presenting it, there whole chunks missing, but last night I just sat down and let it out.


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09 Mar 2014, 7:11 am

Trouble with your poem is it causes the reader's mind to slip into that Steven Sondheim song from "A Little Night Music": 'Bring in the Clowns".





Where are the clowns?

There ought to be clowns.

Call on the clowns.

Don't bother. Theyre Heeeeeerrrre.



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10 Mar 2014, 7:32 am

s**t thunk clunk dunk

I didn't write it for you
It wrote me


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10 Mar 2014, 7:15 pm

Oh, where are the trolls?

There have to be Trolls….


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11 Mar 2014, 7:15 am

Hi Prof!

:D

in a million words or less
do you think I missed you more
or did you miss me less


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13 Mar 2014, 6:51 pm

Ones right here but I'm more of a practical joker than something vicious :P



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14 Mar 2014, 5:58 am

modernmax wrote:
If you don't mind I'm going to post this on another forum where there is a thread related to trolling, because this is beautiful, elegant, truthful writing. Kudos to you.


Thank you
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I give you my permission

and also I am very ready to viking forth against individuals of whom their behaviour, attitude and alliances stink like dead things!


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14 Mar 2014, 6:07 am

MrOddBall wrote:
Ones right here but I'm more of a practical joker than something vicious :P


I'm a lot more sillyious than anything else!

joking around really takes the strain off

would't mind a pm except
WP pms and emalis died on me
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