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Do you think I should try to become an author?
Yes. 80%  80%  [ 8 ]
Maybe yes. 10%  10%  [ 1 ]
Perhaps not. 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
No. 10%  10%  [ 1 ]
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02 Apr 2015, 8:09 pm

It's probably been said already, but the sentences are dragging on a bit far. I was also confused as I thought the first sentence was in the present tense, but then jumped to the past tense. Also, a few too many long words. That's just my piece on this, probably doesn't mean much.



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02 Apr 2015, 8:19 pm

Kraichgauer and Iamaparakeet, are you sure private messages wouldn't be a better place to discuss? That's getting pretty long and OP is probably checking back looking for responses that help him with his questions about writing and becoming an author.



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02 Apr 2015, 9:06 pm

downbutnotout wrote:
Kraichgauer and Iamaparakeet, are you sure private messages wouldn't be a better place to discuss? That's getting pretty long and OP is probably checking back looking for responses that help him with his questions about writing and becoming an author.


I am the OP and until my wife is back, I can't focus on writing. Maybe PMs would be better, but I'd like my wife to know I love her and I hope she is reading so that I can keep letting her know it. I said wrong about her here, so I'm trying to make it up by saying right about her here. I love my wife and if I could do anything to bring her back I would. I miss her more than anything and anyone else in my life, including my mom and dad.


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02 Apr 2015, 9:30 pm

MonochromeMatryoshka wrote:
It's probably been said already, but the sentences are dragging on a bit far. I was also confused as I thought the first sentence was in the present tense, but then jumped to the past tense. Also, a few too many long words. That's just my piece on this, probably doesn't mean much.


Yeah, I know I tend to make run-on sentences. Thanks for the criticism.


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