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Aurore
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20 Jul 2008, 11:19 pm

DJRnold wrote:
I barely understand what "emo" is...
but I tried to write an emo poem anyway:

Don't tell me that you love me.
Your lies darken my already-black heart.
How can you love something you can't even see?
Where am I? It is too dark here for me to know...

But I will never leave this place.
Beyond these dark walls, the light burns my broken soul.
I would rather stay and rot here in this puddle of blood.
No one will miss me, because nobody ever knew me...


After reading other poems on this page, I have realised that my poem is really lame...


No, you're poem's great. : )

For the definition - emo is basically very whiny and overdramatic. Which can be fun to write, with the right spirit in mind!


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21 Jul 2008, 12:44 am

I just realized that my "poem" sounds more like a doom metal lyrics than emo poetry. That's more my style I suppose.

How exactly does one define a poem that is "emo"?



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21 Jul 2008, 5:11 am

Mine sounds like emo denying being emo. And love. And hate.

...Meaning, minus the hate, that poem might be me incarnate. XD

Also, DJRnold, your poem's awesome. 8D Really.

And SIXLUCY, I'm loving that as well.


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21 Jul 2008, 11:05 am

Here is another one.


The lights of the cities
are all dying
as the light is vanquished from the streets
and the ocean of darkness enevelopes the city
from the heights of skyscrapers to the veld beneath it

the government is incompetant
the bueraucrats are self-absorbed
and my life is armageddon

My friends all left the country
and the protea does not bloom anymore
and the grapes don't blossom anymore

all of the gold and diamonds are gone
and the gun and sword are what's in abundance

violence and devastation
of our past

becomes our future premonitions
and blood flows gratoutiously and omnipresently
and the river of misery washes away all what was left in the past

the days when the walls seperated us
have vanished
now the days where bits of gold seperate us are here

now we are going to hell
and we are going to die a painful death
let me open the door
and let the murderers and rapists in.

Now, I wrote this about overly negative people in certain country, see if you can get contextual cues.



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01 Aug 2008, 4:51 am

Only in death do I feel alive
I can see death in your eyes
Now I silently wait for you to arrive
Bury the half-lit skies

I didn't know what to live for
So I've found something to die for
Now only tepid time will tell
If you can die for me as well



...wow, where did that come from? That was kinda fun.



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01 Aug 2008, 7:28 am

My life fades, into oblivion I rest.
Decadent skies serve only to wound me
I am mocked by Mother Earth.



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01 Aug 2008, 11:10 am

I see the candle light burning in your eyes
Flareing up my eyes in flames
On this pitch-black summer night...
Of passion and pain

The razor caressed my flesh and my arms turned red,
I feel a vast desire
Years of pain are flowing down my arms.
Sweet, red, warm stream you drink, make me released
Give me your hand, let me make you feel the ease,
In the Bed Of Razors we bleed together, forever..

I feel the fire burning in my heart
I see it sparkling in your eyes
The blaze you're feeding more and more

The razor caressed your flesh and your arms turned red,
I feel your vast desire
Years of pain are flowing down your arms.
Sweet, red, warm stream I drink to make you released
Holding your arms, cherish this composure
In the Bed Of Razors we sleep together, forever...


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01 Aug 2008, 11:13 am

Enemy, take one good look at me
eradicate what you will always be
Tainted flesh, polluted soul
Through a mirror I behold
Throw a punch
Shards bleed on the floor
Tearing me apart but
I don't care anymore
Should I regret or ask myself
Are you dead yet?

Are you dead yet?!


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01 Aug 2008, 2:51 pm

Fnord wrote:
An Emo Haiku:

Nobody likes me.
Everybody hates me.
My life is hopeless.

Emo Haiku #2:

Another fine day
People laughing holding hands
Kill me kill me now


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02 Aug 2008, 2:02 am

I'm not really sad I just want attention
My sisters jeans are sterilizing me slowly
I'm 14 but I already feel like giving up
Did I mention I want attention



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02 Aug 2008, 8:48 am

Fnord wrote:
Fnord wrote:
An Emo Haiku:

Nobody likes me.
Everybody hates me.
My life is hopeless.

Emo Haiku #2:

Another fine day
People laughing holding hands
Kill me kill me now

Emo Haiku #3:

No one understands
I hate all your attention
It's all about me


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02 Aug 2008, 9:06 am

Society is a mudball
Thrown at the eye of my soul
This culture isn't tasty
It doesn't fill my bowl
Oh!

My hands are sore,
My feet are tired,
And my mind is getting old!
So heed this rhyme
about our feeble time
upon this old and dying world...
:P

I'm not really sure if these two fit together, I just wanted to say both ^^


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02 Aug 2008, 11:37 am

The black cloud of sorrow hangs over my heavy heart.
The vile flames of anger flare up in destructive rage.
The world is so unfair as people wreak their destructive art.
Such things are so evil for a person of my age.

It's Friday today but my mind is black.
My parents don't know of the pain they have caused me,
Of course. My loathing for them is back.
As anguish's gloomy shadow hangs over me,
I know I must face it. The horrible, horrible truth.

Why did my parents not give me allowance this week?

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03 Aug 2008, 7:56 pm

Fnord wrote:
Fnord wrote:
Fnord wrote:
An Emo Haiku:

Nobody likes me.
Everybody hates me.
My life is hopeless.

Emo Haiku #2:

Another fine day
People laughing holding hands
Kill me kill me now

Emo Haiku #3:

No one understands
I hate all your attention
It's all about me

Emo Haiku #4:

I'm baring my soul
As if it matters to you
Stay away closer


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03 Aug 2008, 10:14 pm

why must they kill me,
the pain they have caused,
I showed my pain and they caused more,
I'm dying slowly of slight unpopularity
I have already sealed my fate in stone,
Until it comes I will make myself feel worse
when it comes I will find rest and peace in death


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