Poem I wrote, please comment

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I had a dream the other night,
Leaves were falling, sun was bright,
I was walking home from my first school,
The autumn breeze was brisk and cool.
I remember the neighbour's blue hydrangea,
I just knew peace, no fear or danger.
That flower reminds me of a simpler time,
No lies or deceit, darkness or crime.
Before I was lost, and pre-9/11,
But now, years later, I'm in hell, not heaven.
For me, life is a long cruel tease,
I wish I could be back with that autumn breeze.

I dunno if it's any good, I just wrote it randomly in the back of my science book at school.

That my dear friend, is beautiful.

Very nice. Poetry is a great way of getting out all the emotion that is strangling you, it least for me it always was.

I found it trite, but that's just me.

I wrote a mimic poem:




Aspies

i tried reaching out to people
i went to the forum, and they told me - post.
i posted and sent private messages, and tried.
i tried and by Friday nobody responded. and i cried.
and when i stopped, i was dryed. and nobody replied.

i figured i just thought i tried
and i went to sleep believing i did not mean to try.
i tried. and this time i shook hands and smiled.
they shook my hand and smiled and i said to myself
"i've got it."
and i tried to send emails and phone calls
but they died.
and nobody replied.

i think they never felt a thing.
and i was so sure i had it.
and still i tried and i got my hopes up
and nobody replied.

Nice one L2S, you kind of sound like Shel Silverstein in need of Prozac. But it's good.