Frankenstein's Monster

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22 Nov 2009, 12:53 am

A world given to normalcy
at my passing watches warily
my eyes as dry as desert sand
they think i do not understand
the emotions that they come to feel
a weight that causes me to kneel
an inner light that goes unknown
behind a mask of flesh and bone
science gone wrong, abomination
the darker side of man's creation
to wander forth and ever be
iconic of man's duplicity
a nomadic trek of haunted steps
a wait to see God's promise kept
that though unnatural the birth
he least in me might find some worth
my days to me fragmented dreams
a patchwork heart with nightmare seams
love from none to spare upon
this life-given automaton

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22 Nov 2009, 8:22 am

that's very good! did you write it? If so, well done!

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22 Nov 2009, 4:00 pm

HaliaTotheres wrote:

that's very good! did you write it? If so, well done!

yup indeed i did write it

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23 Nov 2009, 2:07 am

All who confuse Frankenstein with his monster shall have their noses filled with chili peppers

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23 Nov 2009, 11:46 am

Eggman wrote:

All who confuse Frankenstein with his monster shall have their noses filled with chili peppers

no idea why you felt the need to bring that up.
since no one in this thread has yet made that error.
looking at the title of my poem, you can see i certainly haven't anyways.

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23 Nov 2009, 9:11 pm

nowhere did I say you did

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23 Nov 2009, 11:45 pm

Cool poem. I thought that I was the only one who identified with the monster but since I've been on this forum I've seen this reference crop up on numerous occasions.

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24 Nov 2009, 1:57 pm

Eggman wrote:

nowhere did I say you did

ahh, k.
well, just thought i'd clarify the point anyhow.
but i agree btw. so many people make that confusion

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24 Nov 2009, 1:59 pm

Magnus wrote:

Cool poem. I thought that I was the only one who identified with the monster but since I've been on this forum I've seen this reference crop up on numerous occasions.

yeah, it's a take from the monster's perspective.

but when i wrote it i also sorta identified with it. so i guess aspies and auties may be able to identify with it also.

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