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And last time I had a fever was two Januarys ago

I'm a Capricorn. I'd say I stick my my sign pretty well

woah i thought you said, i had chicken and patatoes with aspergers

Lightning88,
I'd give you a 9.

Yes, not having periods was my mistake on the copy/paste. And you are also correct about not writting the third . Didn't realize quotes show in the search as yours. My apologies. I hate to give a 10, since that implies perfection... I'm dithering between 9.8 and 9.9... Perhaps a 9.85.

Land of Stormy Skies

Prologue - The Great War

Pitch blackness. It had become quite common lately, since the sun had been blocked out by toxic clouds, whose rains came down like the plague and were hated and feared everywhere.

The entirity of Mobius was slowly dying. Little by little cities and towns were wiped out by one terrible thing or another. Every day the news broadcasters came out with something about how "...the village was brutally destroyed by a hydrogen bomb! No survivors were found..." Or the clouds came and dumped their lethal contents on thousands of helpless Mobians, killing them eventually by radiation poisoning.

But tonight, the black was disrupted by a grand menagerie of light: the beginnings of what would become the Mobian seat of power years later.

This seat of power, however, was not one of good. At its heart was pure evil; the seat of Doctor Ivo Robotnik. Robotnik had always been very bright for his age as a child, and his abnormal IQ of 300 had let him to question the good ways of the society that he lived in. His parents were Puritans and he hated them with a passion.

After years of secret plotting and preparing he released his attack upon the unsuspecting empire city of Mobotropolis. Only a handful of small children survived the attack because of their determined parents, who knew of the only remaining shelter in the city.

The light came from hundreds of factories, which were run by worker robots whose eyes saw but did not see, their senses both alert and deadened. They were alive but dead. They had eyes but did not see. The night vision scanners in these eyes did not require light, but since Robotnik wanted to use as much power possible, he flooded the factories with light, flooded them until the light had pushed back the darkness into every possible corner and strangled and drowned it until it vanished into thin air.

There were also the guard robots, who patrolled the streets of former Mobotropolis, seeking anything that lived and giving it a strong dose of morphine, which circulated in their body and poisoned everything it touched until the poison took the life away.

One of these guard robots was on its nightly patrol when it sensed something abnormal.

[~/Applications/Scanner:SWAT]% Life form detected. Yellow Alert.
[~/Applications/Spedometer:SWAT]% Error: Life form traveling at speeds exceeding 500 miles per hour. DOES NOT COMPUTE. DOES NOT COMPUhryuhi/FYT&#Tfy7wt3784eirulfll34fEWHUY*#($ofih