I would recommend consolidating. I noticed that in every paragraph a reference is made back to the doctor's personal prejudice and/or judgements about you/your communication/asperger communication traits. The basic content is great. All you would need to do is locate the repetitions and then figure out the best placement given the flow of the other content. I feel that that idea probably works best as part of closure rather than introduction. It could be harnessed for maximum burn as a punchline of sorts. Don't mention it once throughout the rest, make it all sort of objective so that reading it from our perspective has a satirical feel, then lay on the indignation in a few sentences about his unprofessional conduct and the desire for no more contact, refunds, etc.
13 Aug 2010, 8:23 am
