A peice of writing I did with someone on the Spectrum

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Okay, I haven't posted it here, but I've got the link listed. The reason for this topic being that I want a bit more feedback on it as to how accurate I've made this character (authenticity is one of my first concerns), but I feel that I can get more feedback on it if I just put up a link here. You can read the other bits of my story as well, but the one I'd like to have your attention with is the latest one.

As a note before you read this: This story involves aliens. Yes, aliens. As a result, their version of Aspergers/Autism is a tad bit different from ours (well, I'm trying to be creative!). The only major difference is the touching thing, whereas instead of disliking/liking being touched anywhere, this character hates being touched on the shoulders, but finds being touched on her feet soothing, also the fact that on that planet, it's called Efburgeson's Syndrome. Here's what she looks like (this is also a good base for all the other characters as well):



And here's the link to the chunk of writing I would like your opinion on:
http://www.wrongplanet.net/modules.php? ... 463#351463
I hope I'm not wasting your time!

*keeps on waiting...*

I guess 50% people here have ADHD like me .I will take a bullet before I read fiction.
Though I will watch the hollywood movie version when you go big time.

Okay, thanks!

At least I got a reply.

I'm about to read it, I'm an an avid reader of science fiction and fantasy, though my own writings and study are all non-fiction.

I will offer you a critique very soon!