Outcast Fanfic Choose an Adventure story!!

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Welcome back, no awards noted. I think B because the plot must move, and the ring prove it's use.

Great writing during your rest. a solid block of new tools for later use, and Scythe is about to start hitting herself. We cannot stay for 15.3846 days, so something has to happen.

We went to Marilyn's house to find the braclet, learn how it worked, and unworked now, so it can be used later.

Scythe is a sneak, so she has been looking in Koise's mind while he was distracted.

Kipo will remember the ring that reduced her fears.

C-Perhaps parts of the book are burnt off?

C.

Geez, it's all up to a tie! And I don't know which to pick!

I'll go with B.


Koise looked at the pages. They were right there. On the top of the left page it said "The Mental Bracelet of Anaroin and How to Use It". Koise read it out, and also the following information:

"'The Bracelet of Anarion is names such because it was owned and crafted by Anarion (132-185 AD) of ancient realm. She grew up as a person who loved to get in the minds of people and mess with them, so used the magic powers in her area to make and charm a bracelet. She died at the age of 53 during the Magic Purge.' Magic Purge?" Koise asked Bob
"That was when all magic was banned and abolished in favour of technology. It happened about 200 years ago."
"Ah, okay." Koise read on. "' The Bracelet was stored in one of the Underpasses made by the Urn (for further reading, see The History of Urn, available in stores now).

When one wears the bracelet, it remains it's ever-changing colour, and they can transport themselves into the minds of any living thing (including plants and fungi) by simply thinking of it and being inside it's mind. The wearer's physical form is then transported into the mind of whatever they were thinking of, and the bracelet will be on the object as well, but they have to be within a certain radius.

Once inside an entity, the user cannot move the object, but can speak telepathically to it, and if they can speak back independently, you are able to have telepathic conversations. This can be useful for speaking in private or for motivating your plants to grow (dying gardens have been linked to suicidal tendencies in plants). You are also able to go into the memories of the entity you are in and see their past, even areas hidden from them (handy for amnesiacs), and feel the feeling they felt at the time. However, you are unable to move the entity's physical body.

The entity who you are inside will also be wearing the bracelet, and the bracelet will turn a certain colour depending on it's personality mood:

Blue= Someone who is contempt with life
Green= Someone who loves life and making things grow (not restricted to plants)
Yellow= Someone who loves life, but more in the sense of living it and having fun rather than looking after it (mostly attributed to young children)
Red= Someone who love life in the sense of being a daredevil and living to life's extremes.
White= An angelic character, someone who loves to help others and see everyone happy, and has little flaws.
Grey= Someone who dislikes life and everything in it.
Black= Someone who is having suicidal tendencies, and is losing hope in life. When it is full black, then it means the person is ready to commit suicide.

These colours can mix with others on the list to make a whole personality colour. For instance, Yellow and Black makes a personality of someone who would usually like having fun, but at the moment isn't particularly enjoying it.

SIDE EFFECTS' Oh man, here's what we need." Koise said.
"'Little side effects are known Anarion's Bracelet save one: If the entity who is wearing the bracelet has the bracelet removed by force, then the wearer is stuck inside the entity. They lose the ability to see the entity's memories, but oddly gain control over it's body. Anarion ran into such a situation when she got stuck in her best friend's body, who was known as Ithilica. When she did, she made a counter device called the Reversal Staff. This device reverses all spells on an entity, although this is ineffective on more powerful spells and charms. This device was popular among beginner charmers for reversing any mis-laid spells. This device can be found in a Underpass in the Kulun Mountain Range.'

That's it." Koise finished. The Kulun Mountain Range was the mountainous area where Marilyn's house was situated.

"So we need to explore these mountains to get him out?" Scythe asked
"Seems like it." Bob answered.
"Does anyone actually know where they are?" Booger asked
"Yeah, I do." Bob said. "This is why I needed Marilyn's welding skills when she came here. While Marilyn's house contains the passage to LOSA, it's been 'deactivated' and needs to be activated on the other side. I found the door whilst exploring the mountains, but it was blocked by a thick sheet of metal. No doubt this passageway will contain the Reversal Staff as well."
"So, let's get going!" Marilyn said.
"It's not that easy." Bob said. "The way there is long and will take quite a while to get to. We've spent most of today looking for this info, and I can say with a lot of certainty that it'll take at least six hours to get to."
"Oh..." Marilyn said.
"But we have to get there ASAP. The wild inhabitants of LOSA are getting stronger everyday and may get to the place first and activate the passageway."
"So, what do we do?" Booger asked.

Yeah, what DO they do?
A) Leave right that moment.
B) Wait until morning.
C) Get the right stuff to make the journey easier, but as a result set off in two days.

Somewhere between B & C. They do not seem to have slept or eaten.

B. It's a tough choice though.

Oo goody! A tough choice!

I always find that in novels. Lisa says the only reason Harry Potter's so stressed is because he's never ONCE actually taken a leak!

I certainly hope so LadySong! I mean RainCass! Oh dear, I've gone cross-eyed...

Uh, how about B?
But I agree with Inventor and Rainsong.

They probably have to eat or use the toilet or something by now.

Well I could point out that they could have done that in the morning before they left, or when they came back, but yeah, I try to include that in my story(ies).

For the choice, I'd say C.

You need to develop a few of your characters more. Thus far, Koise has no faults. Bad. All real people need faults. Try making him invade other's privacy, or cave in to peer presure. Kipo is fading quickly into the backround. Make her stand out more. Bind her more closely to the group. Maybe she knows something important, or maybe she has magical powers. Bob and Booger just aren't interesting. Maybe you should kill them off.

Well I'm writing this as I go along. I'll show Koise's faults in a situation sometime, because he DOES have them, I just haven't shown them yet.

Also, Kipo being in the background is quite natural, considering that her being on the Spectrum would cause her to drop out of a lot of situations. She therefore stands out more if there's only a few characters in the group, like earlier on when it was just her, Koise and Marilyn, but in a large group of six like it is now, she'll drop out. But I've also got a part of the story that would concern her, but right now it isn't that important.

This info is helpful however, because all these characters exist in my REAL story, and doing this is sorta like writing practice. I always had a notion that Bob wasn't particularly interesting, and he's supposed to be a main character in my story, but I've never considered Booger to be boring...