A free-verse poem

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Takers

To think and take-
To think of not taking-
To not think and take-
To take without thinking-
When I stop to think
we all take to taking-
Neurodiversity matters not

Sheeple go TAKING
abnormality from the Berger'sand fries.
The Berger's TAKE in too much of what's around.
The fries TAKE the life that's given to them
and hope to grow up and TAKE their place in the world.
The world TAKES its time spinning through time
And time TAKES too long for some lonely people
who TAKE their lives

and take a fry from the earth.

We all take to taking
We take from takers
Because it's the only way to live or die.







Thoughts? Comments?

*snaps fingers and nods head approvingly*

Here's my snobby critique:

It flows really well for the most part, but maybe I'd rethink "takes its time spinning through time". Is the repetition on purpose? Also, I think you could come up with a more unique way of saying "sheeple".