Two dystopian short stories I'm writing.

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I'm writing two short-storiies right now about resistance to a new world order. The first one is called Organicide is about the future of cybernetic implants. Humanity has tweaked itself so much with the stuff, that by 2267, the general population is 90 % robotic with only 10 % organic material left. Organic humans are the minority and work as slave labor in exchange for food and water. Then, out of the blue, they are not needed anymore and the cyborgs commit ethnic cleansing. The story is told diary style by an adult-sufferer of typical AS. It tells how he gets out into the wilderness( the cities of this day and age are independent from each other and the wilderness in between is very polluted)

Now the second short story is about a new world order. In october 2012, a presidential candidate almost dies on national tv from a falling ceiling girder. He reveals his true form in order to protect himself from the girder. He and many of the greedy and corrupt political elite or greedy upper-class(not all rich people are greedy so I'm not stereotyping) a are in fact dragons(dragons are naturally greedy and hoard precious metals and gem). They shapeshift into a human form that does age but is discarded for a new form when a normal human would die. About 1/16 of the population of earth is coprised by these shape-shifters. They have tried to put themselves in control of the major world powers for many centuries. They would have suceeded if not for this incident. They took over with force instead of silently like they wanted. Humans are now hunted. Half the world population is in a state of paranoia and cannot think straight. The survival instinct kicks in and suddenly people are killing each other for food, water, and shelter. There is plenty of this but its dangerous to get to with the ravenous dragons that patrol the sky looking for humans. Humans are either used as slave labor or eaten. The story takes place in Newark, New Jersey in december 2012. A community of humans has settled in the skyscrapers of the city. the city functions like a country and the towers are like states. The dragons cannot get into these buildings because they cannot fit and they are useless in their human forms. There is a militia comprised of ex-military that protects the building from outside attack and other such stuff. Gathering groups scour the buildings of the city for food and such which is rationed off in miniscule portions to the 1300 that take refuge in the towers. Untreated water is drunk as their is still running water yet no one to treat it. portable electric generators are used for electricity. The humans in the tower have to deal with the fact that the dragons watch their every move. Suicide is very common because of the pressure. The book may be told from the perspective of both sides but I'm not sure yet.

I'm not the best writer but writing is the only way I can express myself because I suck at drawing and such.

Go for it.

BTW, will they be satirical?

No they will be serious. It's social commentary. I will not make the second one too serious but the first one is very serious.

That sounds good.

Good luck with your writing.

This is some of the prologue for Organicide:

This little notebook is my memoir. Who ever is reading this, I hope it's over. I hope they are done spreading their lies and killing their own species. I'm ashamed to mention that they are,or rather, once were human. If you do not know what I am talking about, I will explain: cybernetic implants and man's wishful thinking. They wanted to use technology to fix the human body but became monsters instead. 9 billion people, all updating their bodies with microchips and the like.

The rest of us(some 2 billion people) didn't dabble in cybernetics unless we were handicapped. This obsession with body updating went to the point of substituting perfectly functioning body parts for robotics. Then, they replaced us in jobs as they were more capable at doing them. Pollution was never dealt with, only development of the new self-contained domed cities that were now being constructed. The land withered away leaving us to eat synthetic food. By 2189, Mechanics, as the cyborgs were called, no longer needed food or drink. Then they stopped the aging process and destroyed the reproductive system. By 2236, mechanics were only 5% organic. Emotions were replaced with near monotony and a totalitarian sovereign state arose in each of these new self-contained domed cities.

Then, the hate began. The propaganda machine labled us as inferior trash. We were put in slums and used as cheap labor in exchange for living space and sustenance. I was born aroud 2249. As a boy, everyone regarded me as different and I had no friends. I had so much trouble socializing. My only friends were my parents and an old man next door named Mr. Alistair. Alistair had a salvaged library of books in his shack-house that he accumulated over the years. He'd stolen books from archives and salvaged books from the trash dumps of the installation(city). Text books, cook books, political histories, nothing was seen as not worth salvaging to him.

Alistair taught me to read and write as well as use mathematics. Through one of his books, I learned that I probably had a condition called Asperger's Syndrome. Best of all, he introduced me to the history of humanity. Through history, we can learn a great deal about our future.

I'm liking Orangicide better. Though why do they need to have the cyborg humans the slaves. Normally bioelitists tend to claim that the cyborgs are inferior as they're not 'fully' human and enslave them (see Exosquad as a sci-fi example). Also see how the organic humans aren't as suited to slave labor to genetically modified or cyborg humans

humans are slave labor only working for untreated water and sythetic food which is simple to make . Cyborgs need to be payed to do their job. So after a while, they started using them as labor alongside payed cyborg construction workers.

Cyborgs have a much higher IQ than the average human. They are stronger, faster, and have heightened senses. They don't age, reproduce, or eat/drink. They are superior in that. What they don't have is compassion for the Earth. The more troublesome cyborgs are given restraint chips to keep them from too much thinking. So cyborgs also represent a loss of free will in some cases. They can bypass the system, if they can keep their mouth shut and do what they are told no matter what. It's kinda like the concept of thought crime Thought Crime(I never read 1984) but less severe.

Wow, this is old. I've gotten much better at writing in the past year, but I got writer's block with the Organicide. I changed my mind and I think it'd be best told as a short story of about 30 to 50 pages, maybe even more. But I'm still unsure as to how to go about doing it. I've gone through a couple variations of the idea, but I always get stuck. The other thing I was writing, well I stopped because I eventually found the idea to be quite stupid. I am writing two other things. One could end up long enough to be a proper novel because the story is so long, it'd require that. The other might be like novella sized, so like 50 to maybe 70 or a hundred pages.

The first is about life on Earth after a large construct that was disguised as a meteor smashed into China. It caused a mild mass extinction event. This construct, which was made by a race of extraterrestrials with infinite technology, is part of a sort of experiment. It emits some sort of property into the air and into the water capable of making organisms undergo what I call rapid evolution. Humans are left untouched. But forests become vast jungles, certain animals undergo such drastic changes in under a thousand years so that they no longer resemble what they once where, and two new sapient and sentient creatures evolve on planet Earth. The Feron where dogs and wolves that underwent convergent evolution. In about half a century, they begin to walk upright and there skeletal and muscular structure changes so that they resemble Humans. The first couple of generations walk hunched over with a dichotomous gait, but they eventually walk completely upright and have feet just like a Human's. They still retain the appearance of a canine of course and some characteristics remain like the females having udders.

The other sentient species is the Crik. It took much, much longer for them to completely evolve. Like around 500 to 700 years. They evolved from crocodiles, and as they breed fast, they expanded quite quickly. Being quite intelligent, they figured out how to get from place to place by boat and by the story's start, they are present on every continent besides of course Antarctica. They evolved to become warm-blooded, but like most other warm-blooded animals, Antarctica is too cold for them. While Feron are neutral regarding Humans, Feron do on occassion kill them for food or ally with them. The Crik on the other hand prey upon pretty much anything they find and are quite aggressive.

The story itself doesn't begin until about 1,000 years after the asteroid hit. Although there is much technology left over from the time before the cataclysm(it happened in 2056), by this time, much of it has rotted away or has been lost. Humanity makes an effort to preserve what it can, and there still are many things that have held up, but only important people have them. As in important, I'm not saying rich but rather someone invaluable to society. Doctors, scientists, people in the government. As the Earth was quite depleted of resources, few new technological devices have been built. And in many areas, the forests are too difficult to clear and the wildlife is too dangerous for a mining operation. The book itself is about an expedition that is launched once the(now covered over by thick jungles and firmly lodged in the crust) is found and discovered to be a construct.
Most of the population around the area was annihilated when the meteor hit, so it was too late by the time people seeking the thing mad it over to China(The constuct was already covered over).

The second thing doesn't require much information to summarize. It is about Manifest Destiny. In the somwhat far future, Humanity is unted under a totalitarian and fascist government. Any habitable planets they come upon are wrested from the control of extraterrestrials where applicable. At the current date, Humanity is locked in war with a powerful civilization of ET's called the Yurdzen. The story takes place on a freighter used to hold POW's and revolves around the relationship between a young custodian and a Yurdzen prisoner of war.

Edit: I just started my next draft od Organicide. I think I know now what I'm going to do. I'll put up an excerpt eventually.