A poem about my view on some neuro-typicals

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KissOfMarmaladeSky
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22 Sep 2010, 2:15 pm

Please don't get offended by this!


I am a puppet.
I don't speak on my own; my opinions
Are just shoved-in by another mind.
My emotions are masked,
Controlled by the puppetier
Or the massive audience in front of my eyes.
I do not speak my mind;
My mind is not my own.
I am not myself everyday.
I am a puppet.



I hope this is good, too...



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22 Sep 2010, 2:56 pm

They do seem to be bound by some strange unspoken rules of engagement which might prevent them from expressing their true selves, don't they?



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23 Sep 2010, 10:58 am

very nice, straight to the point, specific. they are just conformists.



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23 Sep 2010, 1:52 pm

Chronos wrote:
They do seem to be bound by some strange unspoken rules of engagement which might prevent them from expressing their true selves, don't they?


Yeah. Sometimes, at my school, I can just here LaKeisha (a code name for this really popular girl in my school) and her friends laughing at the same exact time. I wonder if there is a rule that people must laugh at every joke, even if it is not funny to you.



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25 Sep 2010, 1:22 am

as for the idea...Nt's are largely controled by some other social force...you make a good point

as for the craft of the poem... you need to work on imagery. My poetry teacher used to scream , dont tell me....show me!! !
What is meant by this is create the image of what you are saying in the readers mind, create the emotions you feel into the readers spirit.

example:
This is telling: It is raining and it is a gloomy day

This is showing: Rain slowly falls out of the weeping clouds, watering the day with its sorrow.

See the difference? I dont want you to tell me how conformist NT's are, I want to see it in my mind for myself through your words. I want to feel what you are saying, not just merely reading it.
Poetry is the art of crafting words to create an image that evokes a response in the reader. This is what elevates a rant into an art form.
If you need some more instruction, feel free to PM me


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