A Poem of Mine

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I'm not really that good at poetry, but occasionally i do come up with something good, or half good anyway if i get inspiration. See if you can figure out the story, i'm sure you'll relate...


An Aspergers Lament

In the world of colours you're the brightest of them all.
Everyone pales in comparison to your smile.
You always draw a crowd.
I'm never seen as more than a curiosity.
Just thrown on the friend pile.

And i'm hoping you can see
But you will never see.
No on will ever see.
My face just isn't wired right

You have no idea how much you brighten my day.
Just seeing you gives my day some meaning.
I'm always awkward, i never know what to say.
And you all think it's because im doing it on purpose.
It never occurs that i might be trying to express something i can't show.

And i'm praying you can see
But you will never see.
No on will ever see.
My face just isn't wired right

We can hang around for hours. You'll tell me everything. It always leads to the same person.
You don't realise how much my heart drops when his name is mentioned.
Not your fault though, you could never see how i feel. I wouldn't give you the priveledge if you could.
I can read people another way. I can see the patterns forming. I know where it will end.

And i know that you can't see
And you will never see.
No on will ever see.
My face just isn't wired right

My life is perfect.
Except for the people in in. And everything i do, or say. And where it's heading.
But it doesn't matter how i feel. If i fufil my function what does it matter?
I don't have a function in life.
I don't trust people. I expect them to fufil what they should, and not fufil what they shouldn't.
They can't see that they're apes, simply doing what is programmed into them.

Why would i want them to see?
They couldn't ever see.
And i don't want them to see.
In this way my face is wired right.

In the world of colours you are the brightest of them all.
And i am monocrome, boring and predictable.
Until i'm not.

I'm surprised no-one replied to this. Your poem is really good, and is very honest. I like it. I would write a poem about having AS myself, but it requires a lot of thinking, and I'm not in the thinking mood at this very moment.

i know nothing of poetry, but i like it

I have been writing poetry for many years now, studied much poetry and I have to say your poem is very well written.

Clean up some typos and get a resource guide to publishing poetry like "poet's market" and send it in to a publisher. Make sure you read the how to address the publisher section and read the different types of copyrights.
By the way, publishers usually have a major ego, so you have to mention in your cover letter something they published or a poem your like in their journal to get them to pay attention to you. This requires a little research. The how to address a publisher section explains all that.

Anyway, I really like it.

I like it, it has a beautiful flow to it. Love the line about humans being apes in particular, which is what we are but so many people seem to think is derogatory.

Thanks Guys, i though this thread had died without a single comment ^_^

Although i'm not sure where any typos, or grammer are wrong, so might need some help with that :S




Oh and bonus points if you can figure out what it's about, which should be simple enough

fulfil is spelled fulfill and you need to capitalize your I's when speaking about yourself, unless you decided that it is a statement relevent to the poem to have a lowercase "i", and in that case all I's should be lowercase.

I have a major problem with spelling myself due to the fact I am legally deaf, so I could never judge you. It is a great poem...but editors are picky about stuff like that when you send them a poem to publish.

Ohh and for the bonus point...the poem is about a girl whom you love who is your friend...who loves another and you dont show her how you feel about her even though it kills you. But somehow you feel that this is just the way things are because of social darwinism. Am I right???

It is pretty straightforward, but that is what I like about it.
My poetry can sometimes be hard to follow...expecially if I am trying to be purposefully vauge about it

I didn't seem to notice the mistakes.

I love that too man.