Anyone interested in critiquing/reading my short story?

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So, I'm taking an English Writing class through school at the moment. The story itself is completed and sent off to my teacher, but one of the comments that he made was that it might be a little imbalanced.

I tried asking him what he meant to engage him in a dialogue about it, but all he said was along the lines of "ultimately the comments I make are only my suggestions, and it's your story. Just with what you feel is right for it."

Yes but, Teacher! I wrote it! I can't always look at it objectively and see what's out of balance! Unfortunately sometimes communicating with him via email is tough. He's really, really great — but far from verbose.

So! I was wondering if someone might be able to have a look at it for me and give me some suggestions in terms of balance, or any other area. It's only about 1800 words, and does have a slight autism theme. If so, I'll PM it to you!

Thanks!

I'll give it a read. What's it about?

I like reading! PM it to me.

Mainly a somewhat broken relationship between a father and daughter, and how they got to that point. If I had to give it a genre I'd say realism, or slice-of-life-y. But I honestly have no idea.

PMs coming both your ways! Thank you very much.

I'd certainly be interested in reading your work.