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KMB6167
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09 Jul 2013, 1:31 am

World wide confusion
world wide delusion
religions are illusions.
Ideas fight like they cannot create fusion.

Politics are full of lies
Some beauty in the world, are evil in disguise

School and colleges are full of temptation
Lies and peer pressure are just sweeping the nation

I feel like I want to get out of this life
There are too many illusions in my sight
All I want is peace and tranquility
lies and religion are just liabilities


liability: (something holding you/them back from progress)



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09 Jul 2013, 5:29 pm

:wtg:
wish I coulda wrote like that when I was your age. :oops:



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10 Jul 2013, 4:37 am

That's a really great poem, well done. It has a rap quality about it which I could hear in my head as I was reading it. 8)


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10 Jul 2013, 10:37 pm

Glad you liked my poem. Keep the comments going! 8)