A poem for the sensitive

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I wrote this in 2011 (It's been that long since I wrote anything) and I thought I'd share it. It's very unusual in style, especially for me. Comments welcome and post your own if you like

Just Perfect

Will I ever see you smile again,
the way you once did for me?
Everything was perfect then,
we were how we're meant to be.

Would you ever give your voice again,
and let it take the breath from me?
Everything was perfect then,
we were how we're meant to be.

Will I ever make you laugh again,
and feel that it's just for me?
Everything was perfect then,
we were how we're meant to be.

Can our hearts beat as one again,
or is my dream to be set free?
It would all be perfect then,
the way it was meant to be.

SavvyIdentity 2011

For some reason it sort of reminds me of this song.

[youtube]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=T6fVDAjs9f0[/youtube]

Poignant

Good job on the rhyme and rhythm. I could easily envision it becoming a song.

Thanks for the comments

Yes that make sense for what's it's about.



Actually it was an attempt at a song lol. I guess that takes time though and it turned into a poem anyway.