Is This Alternate History Piece Any Good?

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27 Jul 2012, 3:37 pm

Here is the beginning of an alternate history short story I've been working on, concerning Martin Luther King Jr. surviving his assassination and the aftermath of a much different Vietnam War. Feedback will be appreciated:


Reverend Martin Luther King Jr. had seen hope dashed away before him by those in power, whose progenitors reeked of fascistic hate. The Vietnam War had come and gone, condemning an entire people to economic slavery.
“Enough is enough!” His voice, weakened with age, came through the podium microphone down across the crowd nonetheless whom stood, military-like, inside the Abyssinian Baptist Church.
“Revolution!” The crowd turned it into a rhythmic chant, forcing a thin smile from him as his words were soon drowned out by their enthusiasm. Before the war's end, before Memphis, he'd have condemned calls for such a forcible act. That all changed following a failed attempt on his life at the Lorraine Hotel; he no longer believed in the system, and gradually began to accept that it's downfall was the sole perquisite to America's liberation.



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22 Jan 2019, 10:08 pm

Yes it is.



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24 Jan 2019, 12:40 am

Could work.


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24 Jan 2019, 7:20 am

"Alternate history"? I think that the word that you're looking for is "fiction".

fic·tion
/ˈfikSH(ə)n/
noun

literature...that describes imaginary events and people.
invention or fabrication as opposed to fact.


The world has more than enough "alternative facts" without the addition of "alternative history."