Poem: If God Were a Bully (third draft)

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Mike, can I do you a 'needs something else' on this one?

I like it, but there's something about that last stanza...in the last but one, you've been talking about bully God and his mean ways, and wound up that section with a rejection of him. Then you switch to the compassion of the Christ, but you don't expand on that, and I think that makes it sound a little bit of an abrupt ending. Is what I think, anyway.

The sentiments of the thing, I will also agree with. William Blake called that bullying God 'old Nobodaddy'. Any religion with this separate, power-over God-figure is going to have that problem with the nasty stuff. If God is Love, then it has to be as God-within, God as us (incarnate, not just once, but always and everywhere) - which has to make us a whole lot more loving and responsible to our fellow beings, because God is them too, even the ones we don't like or agree with. But that's a discussion for elsewhere really.

I do like the poem as a whole, anyway, I just think it needs tweaking somehow...

Incel support got mad at me for linking you there. I don't think I'm going back to that place for a while.

As for the last stanza,

The teachings of Christ I have given some thought
While I don't believe all, there are some I adore
Seek not as an end the misfortune of any
Acknowledge the real and be kind to the poor.

I'm just saying, acknowledge that others' feelings are as real as your own. I'm not sure I can expand it any more than that.