New song - not sure what to call it

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05 Dec 2008, 1:37 pm

Verse 1: Pain… you’re rising up again
To claim… to end my reign again
Resist… I stand on vehement

Verse 2: I’ve… been here so many times
Breach… in my defensive lines
Berate… vituperative lies

Verse 3: Fear… I’m stranded in this maze
Time… I count the endless days
Revoke… you reprimand my ways

Verse 4: Wrath… you’re watching over me
Attack… you’re bearing down on me
Infest… in me auspiciously

Verse 5: Stakes… are raised with every breath
Awake… uprising from the depths
Torment… repress my consciousness

Verse 6: Pride… you’re bleeding from my eyes
Scream… provoke bigoted cries
Cold… secluded ostracised

Verse 7: Hate… you’re writhing in my veins
Forsake… I’m bound up in these chains
Stance… I stand against the pain

Verse 8: Curse… you’re drawn from ‘neath my breath
Spread… impulse contagiousness
To crush… to break your ruthlessness

Hope people like it.

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OccamsIndecision
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05 Dec 2008, 2:08 pm

What does the music sound like?

I ask because music is what matters to me, I very rarely get into a songs lyrics. I think I just don't care for poetry, but I love prose.

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05 Dec 2008, 2:44 pm

I like it.
I'm automatically picturing Dethklok style music. (I've been watching too much of that lately and it would fit them.)

As for a name... don't know if you were wanting suggestions, but for some reason I think Seventh Level sort of fits. Like the seventh level of hell.... I have no idea what that is but it sounds cool.

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05 Dec 2008, 8:17 pm

P.I.F.W.S.P.H.C.

An acronym for "Pain I Fear. Wrath Stakes Pride Hate Curse."

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05 Dec 2008, 11:18 pm

Thankyou for the responses. I'll post more songs on here when I write more.

OccamsIndecision - That's fine. It's all solo acoustic music, and I write with intensity and emotion. My music sounds like melodic, slightly classical, experimental acoustic rock a lot of the time.

zghost - Thankyou for the suggestion. In truth, I wasn't really looking for answers, but thankyou anyway. I'll take your title into consideration.

kxmode - I appreciate your suggestion too, and likewise I'll take it into consideration.

Thankyou for the ideas people.

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