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09 Sep 2008, 9:57 am

just a little somthing I wrote , I'm not trying to make it perfect .
Tell me what you thought if you want.





go to the south, to the north,
you'll go and your hart follow

down the plains , through the glen .
up and down ,around the bend.

through the forest's green and vast ,
through the feilds with greenist grass.

higher trees, mountens tall ,
may they make you feel so small.

follow the wind in the trees ,
blowing grass flowing leaves.

autem comes the leves fall ,
making you feel small.

but dont forget the summers breeze ,
carring hope along the trees.

telling truth to all you know,
I'll be here after the snow.

comming by the flowering tree,
the glistning frost surcomes to thee.

listen by ,for hear to me,
I'll come by yonder tree.

walking by that autem tree,
remember me.

remember me.
here to me by younder tree.


we used to laugh,
when times did last.


remember me
Ill come to thee.

remeber me
by yonder tree.



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11 Sep 2008, 9:51 am

Tell me what you think! :D



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06 Feb 2009, 3:50 pm

I don't think I'm particularly qualified to judge this sort of stuff, but I like it. You may want to work on your spelling, though.


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06 Feb 2009, 10:46 pm

nice (:
very imaginative, your words transported me there (:


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09 Feb 2009, 4:17 am

Thanks guys.



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09 Feb 2009, 4:19 am

BookReader wrote:
I don't think I'm particularly qualified to judge this sort of stuff, but I like it. You may want to work on your spelling, though.


Yes my spelling is bad, I'll edit it later. Thanks for the heads up.



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13 Feb 2009, 11:48 am

lol it won't let me edit it.
Oh well. :roll: