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Batz
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20 May 2009, 11:33 pm

Check out this website to view my poem:

Tales of a Memory

Probably not good, but oh well. That's what critiques are for.



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21 May 2009, 9:10 am

Wow, I think it's good. The spacing of the words indicating the physical ideas. I like it.



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21 May 2009, 3:46 pm

I enjoyed it. I particularly liked how you put "two little rings" in the shape of a little ring. That seemed 'right' and comforting in some odd instinctual way.