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I wrote this poem for a girl im not going out with yet so i wonder about that

I see you in the midday it feels like my brains full of taurine
Im like a robot unicorn fuelled by rainbow gasoline
I sit here ranting about all the sh** I hate
Until I see your nice eyes and begin to contemplate
my sillieness
Cant wait to see you again
our coversation is like an apartment bomb set by Menachmem Begin
explosive crazy, wont you join my supernova
we'll frolic and play in valleys and problems will solve em


Tell me what yall think

There are a couple of references in there that I'm not familiar with, and therefore wonder if they will be effective. Taurine and Menachmem Begin. Not knowing more about your situation, comparing conversation to an "apartment bomb" might drive a person away... People used to think I was really creepy and scary for talking about such things in school...

To be honest, though, I'd wait for some other responses before you listen to me. I've never been very poetic.

I lol'd.

This isn't a love poem, this is a script for an action movie. Be more gentle dude

It kinda sounds like the lyrics for some nerdcore song.

Are you guys close already? If so, she might think it's cute. If not, she'll probably think it's creepy. Either way, I think you need to be a little more gentle with your wording; she might not think rainbow gasoline and apartment bombs are as romantic as you do.

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