In My Heart

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tell me what you think! You can hear and read the song again in my Wordpress blog at the signature.

v1:
This is all that I can say
Now you’ve
Went away
This is all that I can do
And now I feel
Stuck like glue
And everything is all falling apart
In front of me
I feel a bittersweet piece of me dying slowly
I wish this…
Feeling could leave and

CHORUS
Everything
You’re everything to me
How could I have taken you for granted
And you, I
Don’t want you to leave
You may not be here with me
But you’re in my heart
Tonight,
Tonight

v2
This is all that I can say
Now you’ve
Went away
I don’t wanna move, do anything to you
I just wanna be
Here to stay and

CHORUS
Everything
You’re everything to me
How could I have taken you for granted
And you, I
Don’t want you to leave
You may not be here with me
But you’re in my heart and

BRIDGE
As I have all these feelings
Running through my head
I wonder how the hell I even slept
In this bed
Everything, you’re everything to me
I know I’m everything to you
As long as I know that, I’ll learn to be stronger
Don’t let me be too attached to you
Cause letting go is hard to do
And being with you would feel oh so good right now…

You’re in my heart tonight!
Yeah, yeah and

CHORUS
Everything
You’re everything to me
How could I have taken you for granted
And you, I
Don’t want you to leave
You may not be here with me
But you’re in my heart
Tonight,
Tonight

CHORUS
Everything
You’re everything to me
How could I have taken you for granted
And you, I
Don’t want you to leave
You may not be here with me
But you’re in my heart
Tonight,
Tonight

This is all that I can say
Now you’ve, went away….

my advice, coming from a non-artist, is limited to the suggestion that you either delete one of the duplicateX3 choruses or change the wording of at least one of 'em.

Part of me also believes that it's good but could be better with tiny whiny changes.
Last Chorus needs to be powerful and not the same so you can then take it down to the end.
Example:
Everything
Yes you are everything to me
Never meant to take you for granted
A-Yeah, I
Really wish you would know
That with you I am home
And your in my heart
Tonight
Tonight