What do you think about my poem?

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When I go to Turkey, to visit my relatives
My family will not be there, to ruin the fun
I will travel myself, and I will stay with a second family
I will have long conversations with my cousins
With the boys, about sports, and video games, and technical gossip mythology
With the girls, about our fantasies, our schools, and how we live our lives
And for both,
The differences between the two great nations of America and Turkey
I will become one flesh with them, and we will be like garments, protecting each other
We will be immersed in the euphoria, the hope, and the love
Bereket will fill our house, and angels will visit
I will cry when I have to leave, but that only makes it more fun
Everything will be great
Everything will be safe
I won't argue with anyone, and the break will make me calm
And I shall gain wisdom, to continue it at home
Pieces of my heart,
Beyza, Umit, Ayse, Zeynep, Ahmet

..Dude...
First, I should say that I'm Turkish myself [Selam!] and it's absolutely amazing to see you here. *epic high five!*
Your poem was amazing and was filled with warmth and the lightness of the soul.
"Bereket will fill our house, and angels will visit
I will cry when I have to leave, but that only makes it more fun "
That part was very, VERY awesome. Just like the poem itself.
You used simple and strong words at the right time and at the right place and needless to say, it turned out to be awesome.
*applause*
Way to go, pal!
Ah, and my name is one of the names you listed at the end, just sayin'.