Kiprobalhato wrote:
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Not bad, not bad. One thing that's really useful at least in my experience is to work on using multis and imperfect rhymes instead of single perfect rhymes.
I grabbed this from my notebook:
so, I'd
imagine that -
- if I wanna start droppin' disses in some
savage tracksi might need to study up on how to
battle-rapbut
until that i'll settle for being a genius and lyrical mad sc
ientist;
announcing the discovery of rhymes you didn't even know
existeven though to me they seem so ob
vious;
and not far from this, i just murdered a dozen tracks with rhyme schemes that are ar
duousSo,
imagine that,
savage tracks,
until that and
battle-rap have three rhyming syllables;
scientist,
know exist,
obvious and
arduous all share two, scientist doesn't have the long o in the first syllable but the stress is the same so it still works.
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