Need oppionins on an autism story i am writing

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I am writing a autism story and need help wording and discribing autism i am doing it form a severe autism oiunt and i have mild autism
Here is the story line he is sitting at the school doing school work he is in a general education classroom with a para pro supplied by pickerington local schools he has a severe meltdown at school that causes him to go to the Nationwide children’s hospital in Columbus to be admitted to the psych unit for severe self injury and a major melt down at school that gets CPD called and him being hauled off the school and taken to the downtown campus and waits in the ER for 3 days in till a mental health bed becomes available transferred to the mental health wing of the nationwide children’s hospital and has to be forcibly sedated for at least a day due to violent behaviors!
Jacob when he was in meltdown mode severely injured other staff and the school presses charges against jacob which results in a the boy who is severe on the autism spectrum to be thrown in jail overnight till his mom bails him out! He is taken to trial and and found guilty and has to go to the state mental hospital for treatment for at least a year but before he can do that he has to spend 1 week in jail family trys to bust him out but that does not work

Here is what i have written so far
it is a normal morning in the ross and the howard family in pickerington ohio and jacob is getting ready for school at this moment he packs his bags with his AAC device AKA his words and is ready to go to school! chelsea his mom says to his dad josh that he seems a little off this morning and should we keep him home from school? josh and chelsea said we will send him but we put a note in his backpack for his teachers to know that he had a hard time getting ready this morning and he will probably need more assistance today than he needs each day. josh who is a teacher at grove city local schools leaves the house and goes to work. Jacob attends school at the sycamore creek elementary school in pickerington ohio. at 8;30 am in the morning the bus comes to jacob's house and picks him up and takes him to sycamore creek elementary school. he arrives at school at 9:15 am just as school started and his parapro mrs ruby lawson or as he says on his AAC mrs Lawson he gets to room 105 which his teacher's name is mike watts or as he calls him mr watts he gets to mr watts class room and unpacks his stuff and gets out his ipad that is his words that he can type on to speak! He sits down and mr.watts comes by and says how are you this morning jacob? He says on his AAC i am not doing well see note from his mom in bag that she put in there. Mr.watts looks at it and it says. “Good morning mr watts this is chelsea howard and i am writing to tell you that jacob had a really bad morning at home so he may be a little off for you this morning please feel free to contact me if you have any questions at 1-614-227-5566 thanks chelsea howard” Jacob started his morning work and finished in 5 minutes and then sat around and waited for the next class to start he was in homeroom the teacher waits for the announcements and then it is reading class. They are reading the book called where the red fern grows! They talk about what they think it will be about and are given their journals to write about where the red fern grows and what they think it will be about! Jacob starts writing that he has read the book before as his mom has read it to him before! The time is now 10:15 which means it is almost lunch but the next subject is writing and he has to finish his story he was typing on a google chromebook He was writing about the time he went to indianapolis to go to the children's museum there he wrote as follows
Jacob ross indy trip summer 2016
I went to the indy children's museum with my family last summer it was interesting! I went in all the exhibits and we were there all day for 10 am to 5 pm in the exhibit once i got lost while we were there and mom and dad could not find me at all so they called the cops and i don't remember this but i asked her and this is what she said about that! : A group of people were exiting the exhibit including jacob when i Chelsea noticed that jacob was missing now that scared me because having a boy who is nonverbal and is on the severe of the autism spectrum he was probably gone for at least 3 minutes and 30 seconds we all fanned out and started screaming his name! Checking in the corners, running in the restrooms. You name it we did it to try to find him. We finally found jacob at the exit to the exhibit about 50 yards from where we all were. He had started to exit the exhibit but got distracted and never left us!
Now back to jacob's part
I loved that museum it has 5 floors and it took us all day to get through it! We only left when it closed and we had not seen it all it was so big! When i got lost i just was looking around for them and they were not there and i had no clue what to do so i just ran out of the exhibit! And they found me crying in the corner! But my mom chelsea kept saying at least i am safe and did not get kidnapped! It was overall a good day!
Well mr watts said it is time for lunch so you guys need to head out of the class room and head to the lunchroom to eat lunch! Jacob Walks out of the classroom with his AAC aka his words and his parapro mrs lawson he types into his Words “Mrs Lawson i need to use the restroom” mrs. Lawson guides him to the restroom and he goes in. He does his biznas in the stall. He comes out of the stall and goes to wash his hands in the sink he exits the restroom within 3 minutes he then goes to the lunch room with mrs.lawson and he gets out his lunch box only to realise that his lunch was not what he wanted. He starts Screaming in the lunchroom kids are looking and going what the heck is wrong with that kid! He starts kicking the teacher in the head. The teacher is mrs lawson his parapro. He hit the teacher he clawed at her. Though a baseball at his own head. Books flung everywhere. Kicking and screaming and biting. They decide to call CPD. CPD was there within 5 minutes of the school nurse calling. They decide to transport him to the local emergency room and then maybe transfer him to nationwide children's hospital emergency room in downtown columbus. His mom is called and told to meet her child at ohio health pickerington emergency center. He is loaded in the back of a cop car handcuffed and taken to the er near the school. Mrs ruby lawson is severely injured and is transported to mount carmel grove city at her request. When they get to pickerington emergency center they are immediately taken back to a treatment bay and he is assisted for his injuries he has a 4 inch scratch on his arm that was caused by his melt down. He is immediately assisted on his mental health status and the doctor named dr rani punja. Dr punja looked at him and said we need to have him go to the emergency room at nationwide childrens hospital. He is put back in the cop car and taken 20 minutes by car to nationwide children's hospital. upon arrival at the children's hospital he is immediately taken back to a room in the emergency room and assessed for his injuries again by a different doctor named nagao masu . dr masu immediately ordered that they send him to the mental health unit and they check if there is a bed in the mental health unit. the mental health unit only has 16 beds and they serve children from age 3 to 21 and to their surprise all the beds are taken. dr masu comes back and says “ we don't have any beds available and i can't release him so we are going to have to keep him here intll a bed opens up.” to chelsea howard's surprise they actually kept him in the hospital. she has to go pick up his brother noah from school so she has to leave her child's side and go get noah and bring him back to there house in pickerington. her child jacob has since calmed down since being admitted to the hospital at nationwide children's hospital in columbus ohio. his mom goes and gets his brother and drops him off at there house in pickerington ohio. meanwhile back at the hospital jacob has calmed down! he is just sitting on the hospital bed in the emergency department waiting for his mom to get back. his dad josh howard left work at grove city local schools to go be with jacob's brother noah back at their house. while waiting for his mom his grandma was with him jacob at hospital jacob says on his words aka his ipad “ i need to use the restroom” so his grandma takes him down to the restroom and he does his biznas and then they walk back down to the hospital room in the emergency department. his mom finally comes back to sit with him. the doctor comes back and says that it will be a long wait for an bed in the psych center. then a CPD officer comes in and says that he is going to be arrested after he is released from the hospital due to mrs. ruby lawson and the school district pressing charges against him. the doctor in the emergency department said that the next release day for a patient is in 3 days. so he has to spend the time waiting in the emergency department as an order from the court. we will also be heavily sedating him due to a court order until he can get a bed in the mental health wing of the hospital. the doctor says that a nurse will be in within 5 minutes to heavily sedate Jacob so make sure he has used the restroom. chelsea his mom said that he just did use the restroom. the doctor said ok good and i will go ahead and call for that nurse to come down here and talk to you and then get the sedation process started. The nurse comes back into the room she introduced herself as Janet Stark. She said to jacob's mom to hold him down and talk to him as they are inserting a IV tube into his arm to sedate him. They place it and give him the medication and then he falls into a deep sleep aka. A coma. They hook him up to all different monitors. Now they wait for a hospital bed to be opened up. at 3:30 am three days later the doctor comes back in and says that they found a mental health treatment bed for him and he will be transferred up there within 30 minutes so by 4 am. they unhook his sedation and machines that were keeping him alive and prepare to move him. the doctor goes over some rules and what he can and can't have in the mental health unit they are as followed.
he will have his on private room and will participate in group activities
he is not allowed to have his AAC or his words on his ipad because there is nothing like that allowed on the mental health unit due to it having a camera but he will be provided with pen and paper to write with so he can work on that.
he will have to have therapy each day.
he will unfortunately have to share a room with someone after his 48 hour introductory period
the average stay on the mental health ward is about 10 days after that he will go to juvie until a court date can be set
the doctor that told them all this is different his name is dr nico andino says this is what you need to do before he can be transferred to the mental health unit right then and there jacob was up and using his aac to talk. he says on his aac device “i need to use the restroom right now” so his mom takes him down the hall towards the restrooms and he goes in the restroom and uses it and then walks back with his mom to the treatment room that they have been in for the past 3 days. jacob gets back up on to the bed and then his mom chelsea starts talking to dr andino she says “ he is nonverbal and can't tell us what is going on he has to use assistive technology to talk like he just did telling us he had to use the restroom. i don't know how the pen and paper will work for him since he is used to that ipad to speak.” dr andino thinks about it for a moment and says “ we will make an expedition and go ahead and let him use that in the mental health unit i will just need to get an ok from you about some things. these things are that he can not have his aac in his room he will have to leave it at the nurses station is that ok?” chelsea says no he need to have it all the time. the doctor says that that is not possible and that we could do that but we would have to put him into a private room and have a nurse with him 24/7. chelsea says that is ok and that would work. he is then immediately transferred to the mental health unit on the 4 floor. his mom has to go home. he is transferred there and put in a 48 hour watch room with a nurse and in the beds there are no restrooms attached they have to go to the hallway for the restroom. he immediately says on his aac “ i need to use the restroom right now” he then is walked to the restroom and he only has 2 minutes to do his business in the restroom. he goes over the time and when the nurse asks if he is ok he can't respond because he has non verbal severe autism. he comes out within 30 seconds of the nurse screaing in to the restroom. when he gets back to the room he says on his aac “ when is lunch i need to eat” the nurse says lunch is on the wards dining hall and is served in the next 20 minutes. at that response he goes into another extreme major meltdown that has to get him restrained and then sedated again while he is in meltdown mode he starts spitting punching kicking throwing papers at them. the doctor incharge of his care whal he is staying on the mental health unit is
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Alex Clark

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I am doing this for my own project
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Alex Clark

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